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Holiday Tournament Battle 3: Bobo vs 8Diagrams
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| TheWatcher |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:29 PM | Message # 16 |
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Quote (8Diagrams)
Erik was right to want specific reasons for voting. It can be helpful for those looking for improvement, which in this case, I CERTAINLY FUCKING AM seeing as how I haven't won a goddamn battle (which pisses me off because I've been working on my writing consistently for a year and should have won but they closed the battle WAY TOO LATE) I meant Agent X as in "I vote Agent X" but it's voting time now... Round 1: 8Diagrams Quote (8Diagrams) I'm a lyrical Spartan that'll send yo' ass right back to Persia Round 2: 8Diagrams I actually thought he had better comebacks in this verse.. Quote (8Diagrams) You can't even spread/
Peanut butter on bread/
So how you think you gonna get to the stuff in my head? Round 3: Tie Overall: 8Diagrams
Message edited by TheWatcher - Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:30 PM
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| TheWatcher |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:34 PM | Message # 17 |
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Quote (8Diagrams) Agent X isn't in this battle, goddamn't! lol! Doesn't matter, he still ripped this shit! My man MC Watcher schooled him, don't tell him I told you this though.. But Bobo, it's not that you did bad at all I just personally thought 8Diagram's verses were better overall.
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:34 PM | Message # 18 |
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you don't need to have constant multi's but its something you should try to get better, especially internal rhymes. it was stuff like this that let 8 downQuote (8Diagrams) You can't even spread/ Peanut butter on bread/ also some of the lines were really really long you should have put a rhyme in the middle of the bar if you're gonna do it that long Quote (8Diagrams) The only use you have for your middle finger is stickin' it in your asshole/ But you ain't gonna get pleasure in that or anything in life, cuz your strength is so low/ its a long line and the only rhyme is at the end and even then, saying he's not gonna get pleasure from sticking his finger in his ass because his strength is low doesn't make much sense, like are you saying its because his finger is too weak to go into his ass? or when people use common phrases, as a figure of speech such as big l's "are you broke? *boom boom* now you're DEAD broke", internal rhymes and double syllables or mulit syllables also give it a good flow, but it takes time to work on it, i'm just saying for the future you should try working on that to get better try listening to Big L and do what he does, if you want punchlines its good to look for words that have double meanings and make a play on that. notice big l always used multi's on his first album,
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:38 PM | Message # 19 |
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i see what The Watcher means, like in the first round 8 did have more disses than Bobo but i think Bobo won the other two rounds at least
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 5:40 PM | Message # 20 |
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Quote (8Diagrams) No, dude, no. I'm saying: He isn't strong enough MENTALLY to give himself pleasure, even if it meant playing with himself. oh well then you should have said that then, like his mentality is so low etc
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 6:45 PM | Message # 21 |
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it does make sense, you're saying you mean bobo wasn't MENTALLY strong enough, Quote (8diagrams) No, dude, no. I'm saying: He isn't strong enough MENTALLY to give himself pleasure, even if it meant playing with himself. therefore if you were to say his mentality or his Quote (8Diagrams) intellectual capabilities weren't strong enough it would make sense, anyway the votes are for bobo 3-1, though i don't know if any more people are gonna vote in this battle now also i was gonna say the main thing you should work on is the flow, maybe try writing it to a beat
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| PNobleDaLyricist |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:11 PM | Message # 22 |
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bobo as well, 8 i think yo punchline game needs work, u put yo punchlines down at random times and dey weren't strong enough 2 make it up...try to make yo punchlines deeper, or make em gruesome on some big L shit, like spit punchlines dat'll make da reader be like DAMN dat shit hurts just read n it lol and set yo flow up betta rhyme a lil mo while diss n da shit outta him, i mean u diss niggas outside of battles betta den u do in battles lol just let exactly how u think of that person negatively out when u type, den make it all rhyme with a easy flow that can be said out loud without sound n sloppy bobo u were decent but u need 2 go a lil extra harder, keep doin wat u doin but go 2 da next level with it
Mainground  RHHF rap 16-7-0 69%(if u round its 70% doe) tournaments won =1 tournament record: 4-3 exhibition record: 12-4
Message edited by PNobleDaLyricist - Monday, 07/Dec/09, 8:14 PM
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:13 PM | Message # 23 |
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^^ so who is your vote for?
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| PNobleDaLyricist |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:14 PM | Message # 24 |
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i said bobo Quote (PNobleDaLyricist) bobo as well, 8 i think yo punchline game needs work...
Mainground RHHF rap 16-7-0 69%(if u round its 70% doe) tournaments won =1 tournament record: 4-3 exhibition record: 12-4
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:19 PM | Message # 25 |
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okay, i think the deadline for the battles should be later tonight or tomorrow morning depending on your time zone, coz we need to vote to bring someone back
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| PNobleDaLyricist |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:31 PM | Message # 26 |
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here's advice, dont ask for advice if you can't handle it
Mainground RHHF rap 16-7-0 69%(if u round its 70% doe) tournaments won =1 tournament record: 4-3 exhibition record: 12-4
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| J-Breakz |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 7:32 PM | Message # 27 |
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Quote (8Diagrams) Right...speak English and maybe I can understand the fucking advice.
Being able to take criticism of your own work is a good skill to learn. Nobody tried saying your shit sucked or anything, they actually just gave you advise on what to do better next time.Added (07/Dec/09, 7:32 Pm)
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Quote (PNobleDaLyricist) here's advice, dont ask for advice if you can't handle it
lol ahahah yeah...
livin life like some cheesy movie
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| Adam |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 8:07 PM | Message # 28 |
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Maybe its those nuts in your way.
I JUST EXPLODED INTO RAINBOWS AND LOLLIPOPS!
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| J-Breakz |
Date: Monday, 07/Dec/09, 9:19 PM | Message # 29 |
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Quote (Adam) Maybe its those nuts in your way.
uh! buh! What nuts?
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Tuesday, 08/Dec/09, 2:14 AM | Message # 30 |
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battle goes to bobo, unless someone still wants to vote
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