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"The X Flu" By Uncharted
Uncharted Date: Monday, 01/Jun/09, 2:39 PM | Message # 1

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im started writing this story at school called "The X Flu", it is about this misterious pshyco scientist who is embarrased about the life in the past and how nobody would accept his experiments.Every since he been embarrased numerous occasions, he lived underground inside a lab under the southside slums of chicago.He wants everybodyto feel his pain so he wanted to invent something thats uncontrollable ,but only he can stop it.He goes out into the city and went on many bank heist so he can get enough money to make this invention. Went back to the lab, and made a misterious but yet dangerously powerful disease...not sure what to call,he just called it the x flu....*evil laughs*

im starting to write actual songs or story made songs so i can expand my talent at rapping besides just battling.It might take me a while for me to post the rhyme but its unfinished .I also migh need help on it

Added (01/Jun/09, 2:36 Pm)
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One day, in a slum, of the southside of chicag

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One day, in a slum, of the southside of chicago
Anyone can become a vitcim
nobody can predict their results for tomorrow
The land filled with grand theft auto
And children knowledge filled with sorrow
every old female wanna see if they have a chance in the lotto
Bu the young ones choose the path to swallow
[verse 2]
Beneath the sewers and surface
Theirs a evil scientist with a eyes of a serpent
With a million dollar lab, he's the only servant
He has a mind so shrouded, with blueprints
It's impossible to learn from him
Before finding a way to payback from his embarrsment
he displayed many of his experiments to the world
but i guess the world didnt cherish it
worked all his life trying to be relevent
it never worked though, his peers would shatter his relevance
So found a way to have a good payback
he worked quickly, yet careful, while his name in one's mind lack
speaking of his name, he wanted it unknown
his self-esteem so low, he didnt want anyone to know he was ever owned (by a gaurdian)

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i'll write verse 3 later


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Message edited by Uncharted - Monday, 01/Jun/09, 2:38 PM
EmSeeD Date: Sunday, 05/Jul/09, 10:34 PM | Message # 2

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are you writing it to a beat?

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eboyd Date: Monday, 06/Jul/09, 0:16 AM | Message # 3

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It sure doesn't read like it's to a beat. Uncharted, if you want this to sound right you need a better sense of rhythm.

my new theme song



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Uncharted Date: Monday, 06/Jul/09, 1:45 AM | Message # 4

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it doesnt have a beat to it, most of my rhymes r usually just acapella.NOW I GOT SOME RHYTHM BOTHA biggrin .I also dj so of course u know i got rhythm.
EmSeeD Date: Sunday, 18/Oct/09, 2:57 AM | Message # 5

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i now write mine acapella but make it to a made up rhythm in my mind. you can always tell if it doesn't flow right just by reading it out loud even if its not to a beat. i realized you can fit pretty much any rhyme to almost any beat, even if all you have to do is change a couple words. my flow is definitely a lot better now but i'm still working on the way my voice sounds, i never sound angry enough

but yeah anyway this is not bad just keep writing and editing


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Uncharted Date: Sunday, 18/Oct/09, 3:58 PM | Message # 6

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Joker dance like this


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