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| ilikebacon3000 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 1:48 AM | Message # 1 |
Emcees
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Call this number if your children suffer from any of the following disorders.
Call this number if you notice your neighbors purchasing large amounts of chemicals or industrial cleaners.
Call this number if you see your neighbor heading to a mosque.
Call this number if you profusely masterbate.
Call this number if you are not religious.
Call this number if you may be attending a community college in the near future.
Call this number if you have a young teenager running rampant.
Call this number if you have fallen and can't get up, literally.
Call this number if technological advances in society scare you.
Call this number if you shower.
Call this number if you feel like a dirty needles are floating in bleach more often than not.
Call this number if you have severe heart palpations frequently.
Call this number if you are a positive role model.
Call this number if you are a negative role model.
Call this number if you want to call this number.
Call this number if you are having thoughts of suicide.
Call this number if you eat processed food regularly.
Call this number if you subject yourself to radio commercials regularly.
Call this number if washing machines shake violently.
Call this number if your device needs repair.
Call this number if you run out of pills to make you feel secure.
Call this number by the end of the day.
Life's a bitch and I'm just along for the ride.
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 2:26 AM | Message # 2 |
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nice i like it, you should try and turn it into a hip hop song and make it rhyme, it might be hard but it can be done
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| ilikebacon3000 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 2:51 AM | Message # 3 |
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Emcees
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Quote (EmSeeD) nice i like it, you should try and turn it into a hip hop song and make it rhyme, it might be hard but it can be done
Really? This was more of a random rambling... but that really isn't that such a bad idea.
Thanks! I'm probably going to try this.
Life's a bitch and I'm just along for the ride.
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| eboyd |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 2:54 AM | Message # 4 |
Heads
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if you get rid of some of the "Call this number"s i think it would be dope. like this: Call this number if your children suffer from any of the following disorders.
Call this number if you notice your neighbors purchasing large amounts of chemicals or industrial cleaners.
Call this number if you see your neighbor heading to a mosque.
if you profusely masterbate.
if you are not religious.
if you may be attending a community college in the near future.
if you have a young teenager running rampant.
Call this number
Call this number if you have fallen and can't get up, literally.
Call this number if technological advances in society scare you.
Call this number if you shower.
Call this number if you feel like a dirty needles are floating in bleach more often than not.
Call this number if you have severe heart palpations frequently.
Call if you are a positive role model.
Call if you are a negative role model.
Call if you want to call this number.
if you are having thoughts of suicide.
if you eat processed food regularly.
if you subject yourself to radio commercials regularly.
if washing machines shake violently.
if your device needs repair.
if you run out of pills to make you feel secure.
Call this number by the end of the day.
Call this number.
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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| ilikebacon3000 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 3:55 AM | Message # 5 |
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Emcees
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Man, I don't even know what this thing means... or what it is about. I honestly don't.
What do you guys pull from it? Like what kind of message, or tone, or attitude?
I mean I just don't... know.
Life's a bitch and I'm just along for the ride.
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| eboyd |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 4:45 AM | Message # 6 |
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Heads
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Quote (ilikebacon3000) Man, I don't even know what this thing means... or what it is about. I honestly don't.
What do you guys pull from it? Like what kind of message, or tone, or attitude?
I mean I just don't... know. first thing that came to mind for me was Gil Scott Heron's poem "The Revolution Will Not Be Televised", not for the content, but rather the structure. the problem is that your version is rather monotonous. that is why i presented my edited version. the message i took from it is that you are pointing out the irony of the fact that we have a hotline for just about any problem and we practically invent problems to create hotlines for, sort of like how there's a medicine for every symptom, even though most medicines create the symptoms you need medicine for in the first place. but really though dude, if you're going to write in a stream-of-consciousness style, you should at least have a general idea of what you are going to write about lol. going and saying "idk wtf i just wrote. do you understand it?" can be cool, in a sense, but it's best to try to convey a message and find that you have conveyed that message effectively. i find that to be the most rewarding thing when i write my poetry, especially the more advanced and avant garde work i've done, because that tells me that even though i was trying to be abstract, people still understand what i was trying to say.
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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| Adam |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 7:07 AM | Message # 7 |
B-Girls
Posts: 3793
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This is a song??
I JUST EXPLODED INTO RAINBOWS AND LOLLIPOPS!
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| s0dr2 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Mar/10, 11:04 AM | Message # 8 |
OGs
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Quote (ilikebacon3000) Call this number if you profusely masterbate.
Call this number if you are not religious.
there may be a conflict hereAdded (10/Mar/10, 11:04 Am)
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Quote (ilikebacon3000) Man, I don't even know what this thing means... or what it is about. I honestly don't.
Quote (eboyd) going and saying "idk wtf i just wrote. do you understand it?" can be cool, in a sense,
reminds me of bob dylan writing Spanish Harlem Incident
"Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things that you didn't do than by the ones you did do. So throw off the bowlines. Sail away from the safe harbour. Catch the trade winds in your sails. Explore. Dream. Discover." - Mark Twain
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| J-Breakz |
Date: Friday, 12/Mar/10, 7:04 PM | Message # 9 |
Heads
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i dont get what your suppose to be tryn to say here.
livin life like some cheesy movie
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| ilikebacon3000 |
Date: Friday, 12/Mar/10, 8:41 PM | Message # 10 |
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Quote (J-Breakz) i dont get what your suppose to be tryn to say here.
I'm wasn't "trying" to say anything. It was just me writing exactly what I was thinking.
Although, after writing it, I realized there is a sorta meaning to it. If you look at American (and western in general) society, you will see that we have a fix for nearly everything either through a pill or a hotline. Most of the time these create more problems. However, there is no fix for being yourself, or being weird, or being quirky, or being friendly, or being human to one another, as that is widely considered foreign and almost rude here. People are so anti-social and it makes me really sad to be honest. Truly sad. I remember about a month ago, a homeless man asked me for a few dimes. I had about 15$ on me, and so I decided to just buy him a fucking meal at McDonalds. I know better than to give him the money, so I went in with him and ate with the guy, talked with him, and when we parted, I gave him an old jacket I was wearing that seemed to fit him, cause it was going to snow pretty hard that night and the nearest homeless shelter was over 2 miles away. People were looking at me like I was crazy. I can see why, but still... It's wrong how people look at homeless people, and even each other as if they are not humans, but mere characters to play with in their game of life.
Life's a bitch and I'm just along for the ride.
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| MashPotato |
Date: Friday, 12/Mar/10, 8:53 PM | Message # 11 |
DJs
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Call this number if you see someone crossing the border.
Call this number if you've been trained well to hide.
Call this number if you were born left handed.
Call this number if you can't find the G spot.
Call this number if you're going to be late.
Call this number if you were taught to deny your pride.
Call this number if you own a television.
Call this number if you eat more than you should.
Call this number if you have a gambling problem.
Call this number if you are awake.
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| ilikebacon3000 |
Date: Friday, 12/Mar/10, 10:55 PM | Message # 12 |
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Emcees
Posts: 3979
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I think Mash Potato gets what I'm saying it.
Life's a bitch and I'm just along for the ride.
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| eboyd |
Date: Saturday, 13/Mar/10, 10:01 AM | Message # 13 |
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Heads
Posts: 13145
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Quote (ilikebacon3000) I remember about a month ago, a homeless man asked me for a few dimes. I had about 15$ on me, and so I decided to just buy him a fucking meal at McDonalds. I know better than to give him the money, so I went in with him and ate with the guy, talked with him, and when we parted, I gave him an old jacket I was wearing that seemed to fit him, cause it was going to snow pretty hard that night and the nearest homeless shelter was over 2 miles away. People were looking at me like I was crazy. I can see why, but still... It's wrong how people look at homeless people, and even each other as if they are not humans, but mere characters to play with in their game of life. that's great! i wish i would find the courage to do something as noble as that 
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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