nice lyrics, if you want to get even better i recomend you start trying double word rhymes. they are pretty nice lyrics though,
Quote (Uncharted)
people be having hemroids/
cause they can't help to stand,
when the mic's destroyed/
lyrics came all over the place
instead of "place" you can try looking for a word that rhymes with "stand" and also can mean the same thing as "place", what word that rhymes with stand but can also mean place? ...Land. You could even change it to "lyrics expand all over the land", you could even look for even more words that rhyme with Land, Expand, Stand, there are a lot of words that rhyme with those.
Quote (Uncharted)
to a fucking silent state/
fuck an beat,
i can do it over acapella breaks/
this is also good but if you want to push it even further you can also look for more rhymes you can fit in here, atm the only words that rhyme is "state" and "breaks", but you can add another word to make a double word rhyme, you could replace "acapella" with a word that rhymes with "silent", there are a few words that rhyme with "silent" eg. Violent, defiant, tyrant.
this is what i would do though
"to a fucking silent state, have you ducking under violent stakes, face a mocking that this tyrant makes, fuck a beat, defeat and chop a fella over acapella breaks.
of course that's just me, i understand that you're still improving and you are, but if you want to push yourself even further, look for more words you can rhyme
