ritesofpassage 1st verse: Just came and went, nothing notable really
2nd verse: Goddamn, did your enter key break sometime between the first and second verse? This is annoying to read. Anyway, some nice lines in there. The flow seems a little off, but maybe that's just because it's in paragraph format
3rd verse: Nice throughout, the "slurp and burp" rhyme came off kinda weird though
Uncharted
1st verse: A little basic, some nice ideas but they're not executed all that well
2nd verse: Started out pretty strong. "haters know they cant even hate on this" pretty much falls flat.
3rd verse: Not much going on here
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