damn you really need some rhyme structure mainance
where should i start, well that last bar had no cadence
if my rhymes been around since the earth started
then uncharted must lyrically shine and blind your weak mind
matter fact, im not even gonna waste my time
im just gonna finally cremaite yo verse, nigga find some new rhymes
i blow up more flashy cars like it was a scene from fast and furious
i turn yo bones from ruthless into being rootless
puttin ya half assed mataphores in bold, like that shit gon work
you know you wouldnt do that if i didnt do that in my first verse

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claimin i need rhyme structure maintence, try my fuckin patience, youll die sufficatin'
its a fact though, my rap flow, will fill your wack soul, like packed bowls
act cold get attacked and slashed like tick tack toe you bitch ass hoe
cock my fist back so i can hit back, split him like kit-kats with raps
ill fuckin, throw you through a dinner table just to intimadate you
set it straight through words you should be thankful
step over the borderline get cut by a sword of mine
stick you like a porcupine for those mail ordered rhymes
or use pieces of glass, no need for a mask, it dont matter he can go last
that flow has to be laughed at you are that bad
after this youll be waring a gas mask with the fumes my raps have
like a politacal debate, your little more then fake
im dribblin your fate, im like a river and your a lake
cause you cant flow bitch, hit you with hands folded til your hands folded
and i dont really have to bold words to show that im better
writing in freezin cold weather and you need to get a sweater
have you breathin in feathers youll be sneezin till forever
cause your soft, i had to slap ya, you aint a battle rapper youre justa average actor

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VOTE!!!

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lol i had to do some last minute editing

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VOTE

Round 1: even to me although

i thought this was a pretty good line

round 2: i think Uncharted won that, lyrics4sale didn't come with as much for that round

round 3: i think Lyrics4sale won that round, he really stepped it up with his rhymes,

so atm i have a draw but i still will have to decide.

and people please vote, don't get mad if i have to send out mass messages again

i don't really get the bowl in the nude part

this concept seems a lot similar to the what i said when i battled lyrics4sale,

i wish lyrics4sale would have wrote the way he wrote in the last verse through the entire battle, i have it at a draw but i'll give my vote to Lyrics4Sale because i think his last verse showed he had more potential