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dropping out rap/poem
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| Uncharted |
Date: Monday, 01/Jun/09, 9:06 PM | Message # 1 |
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On the last day of school, in language arts class i had to do a rap/poem on dropping out of school.I thought my rap was going to be corny at first but it came out good.I presented it to class and rapped.Even though i stumbled over a couple words the class really liked.Especially my teacher, she was pretty on being a lyricist. I told her i stumbled on a couple words but she said "great lyrics" and from that day, i felt alot better about rapping, and makes me more determined about it. Added (01/Jun/09, 9:06 Pm)
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The rap went like this: In my opinion, its dumb dropping out/ Walking with you head down /Under a dark cloud /Remember, education is a tool /You think its cool but in my eyes your a cool fool /Listen to these works, because they are humble /If you dont, you will go through struggle and touble on the double/ Dont dropout, do this for your family Look up to education, so your won't end in a tragedy This is not a exaggeration, /Do this for your determination/ So you won't end up in fustration, Meditate school down to the core/Would you rather eb smart or become poor/Probably even worse/get hated by everybody and not exist anymore/End up in jail, dumbfounded, then your going to cry/ Dont dropout, and improve your 3rd eye
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Message edited by Uncharted - Monday, 01/Jun/09, 8:55 PM
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| eboyd |
Date: Tuesday, 02/Jun/09, 2:33 AM | Message # 2 |
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Not bad. Reminds me of some old school Kool Moe Dee but with a slightly more chaotic flow (because there's more words per line).
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"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
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| Uncharted |
Date: Tuesday, 02/Jun/09, 8:51 AM | Message # 3 |
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Not bad. Reminds me of some old school Kool Moe Dee but with a slightly more chaotic flow (because there's more words per line). - eboyd thanks, thats the flow i choosed, first i tried a rapid fire delivery in my rhymes but i quickly lose my breath, then i used some type of hardcore but golden age type of flow.i think that can be my signature flow.
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| Uncharted |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 2:20 PM | Message # 4 |
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BUMP!!!! anybody wanna say anything else????
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| Boner-Jamz-11 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 3:32 PM | Message # 5 |
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i got kicked outta school
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| ill |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 3:43 PM | Message # 6 |
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i left school now im going back
The World Is Yours
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| TheWatcher |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 3:58 PM | Message # 7 |
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Heads
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A lot of people dropped out of school but the flow wasn't bad.
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| Uncharted |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 4:07 PM | Message # 8 |
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Quote (EYAR15) i got kicked outta school
how?
Quote (ill) i left school now im going back
GOOD JOB!!!
Quote (TheWatcher) A lot of people dropped out of school but the flow wasn't bad.
i know alot of people dropped out of school, it was about people dropping out of schoolAdded (10/Jun/09, 4:07 Pm)
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EDIT VERSION:In my opinion, its dumb dropping out/ Walking with you head down /Under a dark cloud /Remember, education is a tool /You think its cool but in my eyes your a cool fool /Listen to these words, because they are humble /If you dont, you will go through struggle and trouble on the double/ Dont dropout, do this for your family/ Look up to education, so your won't end in a tragedy/ This is not a exaggeration, /Do this for your determination/ So you won't end up in fustration, Meditate school down to the core/Would you rather be smart or become poor/Probably even worse/get hated by everybody and not exist anymore/End up in jail, dumbfounded, then your going to cry/ Dont dropout, and improve your 3rd eye
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| Boner-Jamz-11 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 4:10 PM | Message # 9 |
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i didnt bother trying to learn stuff i already knew.. so i didnt put effort into my work
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| Uncharted |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 4:12 PM | Message # 10 |
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Quote (EYAR15) i didnt bother trying to learn stuff i already knew.. so i didnt put effort into my work
so you pretty much didnt work so teachers wouldnt dickride. Teachers dickride me, not in a good way, they always talk about me, how i walk and shit, why the hell r you checkin my walk...dickriders.Tryin to lower my self-esteem.i walk funny but they dickride for no reason idk why?never done anything to them.
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| Boner-Jamz-11 |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 4:16 PM | Message # 11 |
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teachers were on me every single day, the counselors had meetings with me asking me if i didnt understand what was going on in class. my grades before i left were mostly all F's. PE i had a C (i missed a couple days), every other class was easy... i knew everything the teacher was trying to teach me, i was also in physics class, in physics i actually learned new things and had an A during the whole year.
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| Uncharted |
Date: Wednesday, 10/Jun/09, 4:46 PM | Message # 12 |
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but did teachers roast on you behind your back and do with other teachers and kids for the whole goddamn year...  Added (10/Jun/09, 4:32 Pm)
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| EmSeeD |
Date: Saturday, 20/Jun/09, 4:54 AM | Message # 13 |
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its cool man i like it, i think you brang the message across really well and the flow is good
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| eboyd |
Date: Saturday, 20/Jun/09, 5:07 AM | Message # 14 |
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my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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| Uncharted |
Date: Saturday, 20/Jun/09, 4:49 PM | Message # 15 |
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Quote (Muzzy) its cool man i like it, i think you brang the message across really well and the flow is good
thanks man
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