Quote (s0dr2)
"Lesbian insect between sisters, hot or not? Okay, now that I have your attention, my career aspirations are..."
lol! i've heard people suggest such things (albeit far less outlandish hahaha! but similar in the whole "now that i have your attention" part). i personally think that actually lowers the quality of the work. be subtle but grab the readers' attention. it's a tough task but if you can pull it off i guarantee you will be considered for these scholarships to say the least. when you should actually do is write or at least outline the body of your essay first. if your essay is about how friends and family have helped you get to where you are today, then the intro should really sum up your friends and family and your relationship to them. one way to do it would be to quote someone well known. a quote that describes your relationship with your friends and family well could serve as an effective attention getter. of course you will need to make a smooth transition from the quote to your writing.
the thing is that i can't help you until you write or outline the body or at least describe your friends and family and your relationship with them first though. once you do that i can help you write an effective intro. like i said though, i recommend you write or at least outline the body before you write the intro.
