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2 poems
Uncharted Date: Saturday, 15/Jan/11, 11:02 AM | Message # 1

Emcees
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i just got through writing two poems today and i want yuo guys to check them out

one is more serious and another one is a love poem

i call this one "M.D.W.G. (Modern day War Games)"

one side stands a
runaway kid with a rifle/
the other side stands
a man who looks at killing,
his idol/
both sides are tribal,
from larger nations/
both of their characteristics
are actually ancient/
if you dont believe it,
then why dont you/
why does the two opposing
gangs have to be red and blue?/
why is life and death so hard
for me to describe in my haiku's/
why man choose to die by the drugs
or gun and not the bible/
why most kids battle with trends
for new styles?/
why don't you think
you never been lied to?/
TMZ can't update you with the truth/
never heard lil wayne spit about
today's troubles in the booth/
if you wanna know what
many is running from, its behind you/
hey, look, its the truth/
and you've been on its radar since
your youth/
for some of them, it takes life in prison
to listen/
been lied to through a big wave of gimmicks/
as i look back in amazement,
of my fourteen year old life/
knowing if i just do anything just for the fame,
im rolling the dice-/
to pure hell, trying to rebel/
then regretting cause i failed
in the battle line where losers dwell/
but there's no big memorial,
just a funeral and repast/
how i succumbed for only wants,
people talking how i should've lasted/
i really sucummed to fame,
just affiliation bring a lot of pain/
welcome to the modern day war games/

now im not really a lovey dovey type guy but here's my first attempt at a love people check it out

its called "beyond typical minds"

could i take you on a date? wont lead
to a future marriage/
and coming to ya door with roses;
its too generic/
the light skin and wavy haired
aint present/
the charming pretty boy talk
aint always my prescence/
"Damn girl, you look sexy;
hey can i smash?"/
^^two weeks just for the goods;
that relationship wont last/
come into my way; all of that
will come to past/
yes, we may clash but the
troubles we could master/
most of time, im the nicest
but sometimes the biggest bastard/
some dudes you say they would
stay with you for years/
then break ya heart, like for the whole time
they were scheming for tears/
come with me, we could stand together till
the end is near/
through the troubles, happiness,
strengths, and fears/
telling a girl how sexy they are
is way too original/
when i describe you,
I could gain the perfect visual/
beautiful, smart, and outgoing;
is how i picture you/
everytime i see you, i be hugging you,
like i was missing you/
we orbit each other like
the planets orbiting the sun/
when im with someone like you
i dont be in it just for fun/

FEEDBACK SON!!!

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why do i have 16 views and no comments????

can somebody comment about this???


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Message edited by Uncharted - Saturday, 15/Jan/11, 3:14 PM
eboyd Date: Saturday, 15/Jan/11, 2:09 PM | Message # 2

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this is a comment about the poems.... lol

nah but i'll read them soon and comment.


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"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"

-T.S. Eliot

battle record:

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Uncharted Date: Saturday, 19/Mar/11, 8:16 PM | Message # 3

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Quote (eboyd)
nah but i'll read them soon and comment.

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