good thing grammar and spelling aren't your forte just fuckin' with ya!

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Message edited by MAK_The_Lucid_Tongue - Wednesday, 29/Apr/09, 2:56 PM

i think i may have worded myself a bit poorly. there's great art that is simple, but that doesn't speak on how well done it is. here's an example (a poem i wrote that is quite simple, yet it is well written in pretty much every sense:

The shadow
That one casts
Will fade as he passes.

If he carves his name
Into the sun
His mark will be inscribed
Forever in it's place.

believe it or not, that actually took me 3 months to fully finish (the meter, finding the right words to fit the metaphors, what words to delete/add, etc.), but it is still undeniably simple. now here's an example of something that is written poorly, but has a good message (and i'd argue is performed well). it is also my piece and, coincidentally, it is my most popular piece because the message is so hard hitting:

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erikboyd60@hotmail.com

"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"

-T.S. Eliot

battle record:

7-0-0

i have a few spoken word poems but i am NOT, by a LONG stretch a "spoken word" artist. 90% of my poetry is made to be read. i just use music as a medium to express my poem aurally for, let's face it, not all people can take much out of reading something, and, in fact, most people do not read, but they do listen to music. plus i like music, so why not, you know? regardless, however, i do not try to be deep. in my more recent works i bring up many philosophical points which may, at times, be misconstrued as me trying to be too deep, like for example my poem "Egotism":

They say suicide is selfish
But aren't we all a bit self centered;
Every supposed
Selfless act
Based on pride?

Could it not be said
That every action is a reaction of egotism;
we are all truly selfish inside.

I've had thoughts of bringing
My life to an end,
To begin my eternal sleep,
But will i truly benefit
From my demise?

Through all my hardships
I still yearn for my life to be eternal.
I guess i'm truly selfish inside.

see, i sound like i'm trying to be deep, but it is more of an elegant yet simple way of presenting a concept that is very complex that i came up with in a moment of desperation. this poem is actually unique in that i was VERY depressed when i began writing it, but, almost as if the writing was therapeutic (as it is meant to be), i calmed down and began thinking rationally by the middle and finished it off in a rational mind, so what you are seeing here is half a poem written by an irrational being and the other half written by a rational, philosophical being. i feel it is very deep, yet simple and easy to digest and not written by someone trying to be too deep.

my new theme song



erikboyd60@hotmail.com

"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"

-T.S. Eliot

battle record:

7-0-0

I know what you're saying...I do a lot of writing too - I like people to read it here and there but mostly keep it to myself....the "artists" that piss me off are the ones that always need to be in like Starbucks or some shit doing their writing so everybody knows how 'deep' they are or the one's that go the extra mile with their clothing and lifestyle choices ie. snotty vegans whop only wear hemp and want the world to know it.....
I love wordplay and metaphores and shit tho'....... I just don't understand some of the 'artists'... U know?!?!

Grouch pretty much says it for me here:

C Rayz is pretty much my favorite 'artist'....his shit is deep as hell and it takes a while to catch it all cuz it's so dope...and at the same time he's just himself...he doesn't look "artsy" at all...... check out this tune:

"UNTIL THEY STOP ME, BURY, MURDER ME OR DROP ME, I GOT...THUG LUV FOR MY NATIONWIDE POSSE"

Message edited by MAK_The_Lucid_Tongue - Wednesday, 29/Apr/09, 3:28 PM

no, i understand that. i didn't say that if it was just a scribble you would appreciate it. let me tell you where i'm coming from. i participate in many spoken word events as that is the crowd of poets that gravitate around hip hop and those are the most accessible poetry competitions. i've won a few, gotten standing ovations at most, but the majority of the artists ho come up to speak have written something, regardless of how simple or elaborate it is, that is absolute shit. the construction of words grammatically is awful (which isn't such a big deal if you are going for a specific character, but when you are being your own damn self you should at least be somewhat grammatically correct), the metaphors don't fit right at all, when asked if they know what meter is they often reply "no" or "isn't that about 3 feet?", etc. i get tired of people who consider shit like this good poetry:

like, for example, artists who write modern poetry using "thee" and "thou" and all sorts of shit like that. WTF?! are you TRYING to write in a Victorian voice because when someone does that it puts me in a scene where it is like 1602 and we're riding on horseback, so don't use "thee" or "thou" if you are writing a ghetto love story. that shit just doesn't fit.

yeah, i agree with that. that's a dope track btw. my dad actually says the same thing. same with my man Mnemonic. he's always like "man, Busdriver pisses me off!" lol!

my new theme song



erikboyd60@hotmail.com

"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"

-T.S. Eliot

battle record:

7-0-0

i can tell your a poet

The World Is Yours

lol! why do you say that? haha!

my new theme song



erikboyd60@hotmail.com

"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"

-T.S. Eliot

battle record:

7-0-0