Guilty. cool I have used the dictionary quite a few times in the past.

And sometimes I got feeling that Canibus doesnt. lol

why? have you noticed things in his tracks that he uses incorrectly/out of context?

dont talk to me about lyrics
i know all your little gimics
i know about rhyming dictionaries
and i know about rhymes on dot come please!

you're on the right path. as you keep going with it you will develop your own style through theirs. that's what Em did when he was spitting like Nas and then he dropped SSLP and it was a sealed deal from there.

thats my problem also, and my major problem is flow/delivery, when i read my rhymes i stumble over words.Any advice on that??

DAMN beated me to it lol

its been a long time comin bitches:
I am one of the best yet to come
lyrical haymakers in yo head have sounds of snare drums
I dont make up grudges or dont blow niggas dicks
relieve yo lips on this AK ,the ammo will take care of the blowin
Happy to see the free rhyme token?
Niggas sound like a bunch of mobsters but at the main event they chokin
I dont care though, i rip away his dough
leave some money so he can catch AIDS from cheap hoes
Rip yo body open put it together and control yo ass like a puppet
Cremate your whole body, have your life turned into a external rain of a money flood
Into a eternal drizzle of blood, Everytime I flow I get stronger and hyper
Had no one to battle so i spit my soul through the cypher
Hard lurkin bars blossoms throughout my rhymes, take away yo watch so u wont look at the time
the cypher continues, dry niggas wet chest with thier own muscle tissue
Yall make me laugh bipolar muthafucks
First wanna front like drug dealers then beg for pussy like R&B singers
Snapin yo fingers, talkin hard shit, bouncin around
In ya gay ass videos cars, bitches makin it rain with a glock with no round
Since im young, my elders expect me to do snappy shit
up-and-coming,wack ass underground snap rappers are so lame lookin like souljia boy's bitches
give yall my one-hit-wonder yo ass gon leave with more than stitches
I just had to get that off my chest just had that itch
Seriously, comparing them to me is like comparing a hitman with a M8 to a plumber with a wrench
Get yo girl banged while you in the studio trying to sound like t-pain
Get yo ass gunned up and clapped quick while you gettin hard over lil wayne
No pain no gain,with a little fame,little nigga puttin little rhymes in big shame

In my opinion, its dumb dropping out/ Walking with you head down /Under a dark cloud /Remember, education is a tool /You think its cool but in my eyes your a cool fool /Listen to these words, because they are humble /If you dont, you will go through struggle and trouble on the double/ Dont dropout, do this for your family/ Look up to education, so your won't end in a tragedy/ This is not a exaggeration, /Do this for your determination/ So you won't end up in fustration, Meditate school down to the core/Would you rather be smart or become poor/Probably even worse/get hated by everybody and not exist anymore/End up in jail, dumbfounded, then your going to cry/ Dont dropout, and improve your 3rd eye

They are right. I think what you need to do to get yourself more organized with it is learn about meter. It's not something a lot of hip hop artists study, but you could benefit from studying it. When you get it down you will have a better sense of cadence and your bars won't sound "crammed". It's more of a poetic ideology but it still is important in hip hop as well for people who do not have a sense of it naturally. I posted about it earlier somewhere. You can find more by doing a simple google search on "poetic meter". Of course the meter is only one aspect. There's also always how you say it and I'd say that's more important. Depending on how you say it there's not as much of a need to shorten bars, but remember, the more syllables/chaotic meter you use, the more breath control skill you will need.

LOL...Abba...XD
Anyway, I need help on my punchlines more than anything. Help?