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eboyd |
Date: Friday, 16/Jan/09, 4:02 AM | Message # 1 |
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Do you have a verse, track, etc., that is almost ready to be put on a beat but needs a little bit of editing advice? Write your verse here and people will review it for you and give advice on how you can fix it and make it better.
my new theme song
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"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
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Acekat00o |
Date: Friday, 16/Jan/09, 10:58 AM | Message # 2 |
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N.Y. State of Mind Lyrics Artist(Band):Nas Review The Song (3) Print the Lyrics Send "N.Y. State of Mind" Ringtones to Cell !!!!!DIS AINT DA WHOLE SONG!!!!! Intro: Nas Yeah yeah, aiyyo black it's time (word?) (Word, it's time nigga?) Yeah, it's time man (aight nigga, begin) Yeah, straight out the fuckin dungeons of rap Where fake niggaz don't make it back I don't know how to start this shit, yo, now Verse One: Nas Rappers I monkey flip em with the funky rhythm I be kickin Musician, inflictin composition of pain I'm like Scarface sniffin cocaine Holdin a M-16, see with the pen I'm extreme, now Bulletholes left in my peepholes I'm suited up in street clothes Hand me a nine and I'll defeat foes Y'all know my steelo with or without the airplay I keep some E&J, sittin bent up in the stairway Or either on the corner bettin grands with the celo champs Laughin at baseheads, tryin to sell some broken amps G-Packs get off quick, forever niggaz talk shit Remeniscing about the last time the Task Force flipped Niggaz be runnin through the block shootin Time to start the revolution, catch a body head for hell Once they caught us off guard, the Mac-10 was in the grass and I ran like a cheetah with thoughts of an assassin Picked the Mac up, told brothers, "Back up," the Mac spit Lead was hittin niggaz one ran, I made him backflip Heard a few chicks scream, my arm shook, couldn't look Gave another squeeze heard it click yo, my shit is stuck Tried to cock it, it wouldn't shoot now I'm in danger Finally pulled it back and saw three bullets caught up in the chamber So now I'm jetting to the building lobby and it was full of children probably couldn't see as high as I be (So whatchu sayin?) It's like the game ain't the same Got youngin' niggaz pullin the triggers bringing fame to they name and claim some corners, crews without guns are goners In broad daylight, stickup kids, they run up on us Fo'-fives and gauges, Macs in fact Same niggaz'll catch a back to back, snatchin yo' cracks in black Yo there's a snitch on the block gettin niggaz knocked So hold your stash 'til the coke price drop I know this crackhead, who said she gotta smoke nice rock And if it's good she'll bring ya custom make this better
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eboyd |
Date: Friday, 16/Jan/09, 6:04 PM | Message # 3 |
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Dude, YOUR OWN RHYMES!!!!!
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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Deadly-Sin |
Date: Wednesday, 21/Jan/09, 6:10 AM | Message # 4 |
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DO IT YOURSELF ERIK! DON'T BE LAZY!!! you call ur self a Jap!.. your letting the herd down
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eboyd |
Date: Wednesday, 21/Jan/09, 6:18 AM | Message # 5 |
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what?!?!?!? dude, it's a place for anyone to come and ask for advice. besides, i plan to give more advice than i take anyways.
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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Deadly-Sin |
Date: Wednesday, 21/Jan/09, 6:26 AM | Message # 6 |
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Quote (eboyd) what?!?!?!? dude, it's a place for anyone to come and ask for advice. besides, i plan to give more advice than i take anyways. Erik my fave chinky eyed brother from another mother father family hell even a whole other country...your one crazy jap
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eboyd |
Date: Wednesday, 21/Jan/09, 6:28 AM | Message # 7 |
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LMAO! well, check the beat i just posted in the beat battle.
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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Deadly-Sin |
Date: Wednesday, 21/Jan/09, 6:44 AM | Message # 8 |
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Quote (eboyd) LMAO! well, check the beat i just posted in the beat battle. Who does that!?????,,,,,,,,I DOES THAT!!!!!!!!
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MAK_The_Lucid_Tongue |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:27 PM | Message # 9 |
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I think if anyone is serious about their shit they probably wont wann post it for everyone to see......maybe?
"UNTIL THEY STOP ME, BURY, MURDER ME OR DROP ME, I GOT...THUG LUV FOR MY NATIONWIDE POSSE"
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NtG |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:34 PM | Message # 10 |
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Quote (LethaFace) I think if anyone is serious about their shit they probably wont wann post it for everyone to see......maybe? ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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Lord_Meth |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:36 PM | Message # 11 |
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Well the verse u put in here arent supposed to be serious, just some verses u want to see if they could be made better with the help of others
Sick With It
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eboyd |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:43 PM | Message # 12 |
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"eating Ace's palm" this just doesn't work. some words that rhyme that you can toy around with and see if they work better: napalm, psalm, bomb and that is only by what you did. you can conventionally rhyme with... job, knob, bob, slob, rob, etc. "I ripped u before so therefore I sentence u to death with Horrorcore" "Visions as deadly as Vietnam, but clean as PG-13 porn" the meter on these don't word. if you spit these they would sound awkward. "Cut off the Kat's circulation with Romania Tourist Packet" think about this for a minute. does this make sense? what romanian tourist packet is big enough to cut off someones circulation? Quote (LethaFace) I think if anyone is serious about their shit they probably wont wann post it for everyone to see......maybe? i would. i trust people here. some people are cool with it. idc if someone steals my shit. that just tells me it was dope as fuck so someone else took it. it's an honor to me.
my new theme song
erikboyd60@hotmail.com
"True poetry can communicate before it is understood"
-T.S. Eliot
battle record:
7-0-0
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Lord_Meth |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:48 PM | Message # 13 |
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Quote (eboyd) i would. i trust people here. some people are cool with it. idc if someone steals my shit. that just tells me it was dope as fuck so someone else took it. it's an honor to me. CO-SIGNAGE its not like Im gonna be a rapper in the future and sue everyone that bit my shit Quote (eboyd) "eating Ace's palm" this just doesn't work. some words that rhyme that you can toy around with and see if they work better: napalm, psalm, bomb and that is only by what you did. you can conventionally rhyme with... job, knob, bob, slob, rob, etc. "I ripped u before so therefore I sentence u to death with Horrorcore" "Visions as deadly as Vietnam, but clean as PG-13 porn" the meter on these don't word. if you spit these they would sound awkward. "Cut off the Kat's circulation with Romania Tourist Packet" think about this for a minute. does this make sense? what romanian tourist packet is big enough to cut off someones circulation? Yea that verse was just a ball of nasty and dumb shit, one of my worst it was just a verse full of supposedly funny things but turned out being retarded
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EmSeeD |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:49 PM | Message # 14 |
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Quote (Lord_Meth) Split ya lip like a snake and artificially seal it back i didn't really like this line, why would you split someones lip just to seal it back again?
http://chirbit.com/emseed http://youtube.com/siwooot
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EmSeeD |
Date: Friday, 23/Jan/09, 10:50 PM | Message # 15 |
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Quote (eboyd) i would. i trust people here. some people are cool with it. idc if someone steals my shit. that just tells me it was dope as fuck so someone else took it. it's an honor to me. lol not to me fuck that!
http://chirbit.com/emseed http://youtube.com/siwooot
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